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Hello, Mr. Brown! My name is Eugene and I’m a 9th grade student. I like traveling and doing some sports, so your summer camp is interesting for me.
In this summer I have a lot of time, so I can stay for 3 weeks from the beginning of July. In my opinion, at this time the weather is the best, but that’s very important for outdoor activities.
I would choose adventure workshop, because I tried diving last year and really liked it. Also I have experience in film making, so film academy workshop would be interesting for me. I could help other children and learn something new.
Best regards,
Eugene.

Слово so повторяется несколько раз. Его можно заменить словами и выражениями therefore, that is why, which is why, as a result.

Лучше исправить так:

Hello, Mr. Brown! My name is Eugene and I’m a 9th grade student. I like travelling and doing sports, which is why your summer camp is interesting to me. This summer I have a lot of free time, therefore I can stay for three weeks from the beginning of July. In my opinion, at this time the weather is the best, and that is very important for outdoor activities. I would choose the Adventure Workshop because I tried diving last year and really liked it. I also have experience in filmmaking, so the Film Academy Workshop would be interesting to me. I could help other children and learn something new. Best regards, Eugene.

Здесь также исправлено: In this summer → This summer, interesting for me → interesting to me, but that’s very important → and that is very important.

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